I’ve been searching for more first person present tense material to understand what I’m doing right and wrong myself. This is another YA which isn’t too bad, except for one specific scene, where the (hurt) protagonist (a 17 year old girl) climbs onto the landing gear of a space shuttle, and then literally travels half the world, 16000 kilometres, at 600 kmph.
16000 kilometres without falling off. And without the shuttle retracting it’s landing gear.
Get serious. A pity because otherwise it’s fairly good.
Skip that one gaffe and it's still worth reading.
(Dapper / TellTales #110.)