He says, "It's fine."
The accentuate sections, express sarcasm, and sometimes thoughts:
"How 'wonderful' of him to say so," she replied.
If your format allows cursive then that's another way to accentuate sections, express sarcasm, and thoughts. In the line below you can spot the 'sarcastic' part of her thoughts:
How 'wonderful' wonderful of him to say so, she thought.
My advise: pay attention to your target audience. If they expect a certain format, better stick to it, or you've lost them before you even started...
- Would your character use those words?- How would he / she speak?- Does your character have specific speech patterns?
Peter zei: "Is hij ziek?"
Peter said, "Is he sick?"
"Are you sure he's sick?""I absolutely am. No way he would skip out.""So... We have to find a solution.""Do we? I'm not so sure we have to.""O yes, we do. I suggest we start by watering down the story.""The truth, you mean.""And leave out the worst parts.""Small doses.""We kill his cat.""His cat? Do we really have to?"
Peter asked, "Are you sure he's sick?"John said, "I absolutely am. No way he would skip out."Peter said, "So... We have to find a solution."Amanda said, "Do we? I'm not so sure we have to."John said, "O yes, we do. I suggest we start by watering down the story."Amanda said, "The truth, you mean."Peter said, "And leave out the worst parts."John said, "Small doses."Peter said, "We kill his cat."Amanda asked, "His cat? Do we really have to?"
"Are you sure he's sick?" Peter asked.The little campfire was illuminating their faces. Nobody looked particularly happy.John nodded vigorously. "I absolutely am. No way he would skip out.""So..." Peter looked at his friends, studying their faces before reaching a conclusion. "We have to find a solution""Do we?" Amanda shrugged. "I'm not sure we have to."Doubtful as ever, John thought. He sighed and said, "Oh yes, we do. I suggest we start by watering down the story.""The truth, you mean."John shrugged. She wasn't entirely wrong, but John knew what was coming next. They all knew."And leave out the bad parts," Peter said, ignoring Amanda's comment.John took out his notebook and his pen. He clicked it a few times before opening the book and putting the tip of his cheap Bic ballpoint down on the paper. "Small doses," he confirmed, waiting for Peter to continue.Peter stood up and stared at the flames. He reached a decision. "We kill his cat," he said slowly.Amanda looked shocked. "His cat? Do we really have to?"
Peter said: "I know.""I know," Peter said."I know," Peter said, "and so does he.""I know," Peter said. "And so does he."
Peter said, "I know.""I know," Peter said."I know," Peter said, "and so does he.""I know," Peter said. "And so does he."
"There is a mistake." He picks up the book. "It's right here.""There is a mistake," he picks up the book, "it's right here.""There is a mistake." He picks up the book, "it's right here."
"There's a mistake on page thirty," he pointed out."There's a mistake on page thirty." He pointed out."There's a mistake on page thirty." He said.
"I'm too busy," she sighed, "come back tomorrow.""I'm too busy." She sighed. "Come back tomorrow.""I'm too busy." She sighed, "come back tomorrow."
- organized, one way, controlled, a boss to his employees, a sargeant to his soldiers- disorganized, messy, uncontrolled, friends in a bar, classmates in a break
' Here's my suggestion as someone who still tries to avoid writing group conversations. Firstly, try to get some inspiration. Lilly-rain's 'She's One Of The Boys' on Wattpad where the MC has group conversations with her five brothers! If you find reading group conversations stressful, then try watching shows like Friends where characters speak in a group because the dialogue is scripted but made to appear casual.Once you get an idea for how they work, try to write down all the key points that you want to include in the conversation, and allocate them to different characters. I'd recommend using '(character's name) said' for every character instead of searching for more elaborate dialogue tags- this can all be done later. Don't worry if you don't include all of them! In real life, some people hardly contribute to group discussions whereas others practically lead them.After you've got the key ideas, add in some short quirky dialogue snippets of agreements, disagreements and banter from the characters that maybe you haven't used yet. This'll make the dialogue seem even more casual. Next, add all your body gestures and action, making sure to get around most of the group. Again, don't feel like every character has to be involved, some will just be standing there and listening.Finally, add a few fancy dialogue tags- but don't be afraid to keep some of the 'said' in there- and you've got yourself an amazing group conversation!Hope this helps! If you like, feel free to send me a draft and I can give feedback if you still feel unsure. '
David frowns, looking at the latter. "Is that a Poire Belle Helene?"William nods fervently."And that?" David points at the glass, his frown deepening.In the background, Laura Branigan's 'Self Control' starts playing.William empties his mouth. "Lemon cheesecake caramel with peanut butter!" he exclaims."There's no accounting for taste," Aaron comments, looking for his second banana. He successfully spears it, presents it to the world, then takes a large bite and swallows. With his eyes half-closed he mumbles, "Ah... Bliss... Man, we missed you."William nods. "Yep. That, and the free lunches.""You're impossible, the two of you. All of you." Camelia comments.Lug just smiles.Aaron opens his eyes in exaggerated shock, then gets halfway up, mock offended. "My brother is impossible, let me apologize on his behalf. And, as his eclectic selection in ice cream and friends prove time and time again, he has no taste either." He grins and makes a mock bow in first David's, then Camelia's direction, making absolutely sure we all pay attention when he turns to me and bows more deeply. "Except when it comes to girls," he adds in a stage whisper.His brother punches him, and Aaron's spoon nearly takes out my left eye. I suppress a little smile. Their bantering makes me uncomfortably comfortable."Hey, stop hurting my guests! I still need them. Well, some of them, at least." David's pointed stare does stop Aaron and William's ice cream battle. For now."For what?" I ask.David looks down and hesitates. "I euh...""Out with it," Lug says."I asked you all here... " David starts."You don't want my second kidney?" Aaron asks his brother.William shakes his head. "Nah, one is enough.""You never asked me," I point out."About my kidney, why would I?" William asks, frowning at me.Did he just make a joke, or is he serious? I can't tell.